Saw the trick at a Chamber of Commerce lunch in Tulsa that changed my cold email game
I was sitting at a Chamber of Commerce networking lunch in Tulsa last month, kind of zoning out during the speaker. This older guy next to me, local real estate agent, leaned over and said "you're sending too many words." He showed me his phone with a cold email he wrote that was literally 5 sentences max, no fluff, just a clear ask. I realized I had been writing these long paragraphs trying to sound professional, but nobody reads past the first two lines on mobile anyway. So I cut my next batch of outreach emails down to under 80 words each, with a specific subject line like "quick question about your Q3 plans." My open rate went from 22% to 41% in one week, and I actually got 3 replies from people who never responded before. Has anyone else tried shortening their emails way down like that and seen a big jump?